Tom's fantasty with a star comes true

It would be the concert Tom would be going to. he was so excited he would get the chance to meet his favorite celebrity, britney spears. he had backstage passes and had decided to fine meet his goddess of beauty. he had always dreamed of having a intimate moment with her. He’d first want to just tear her clothes off and fuck her.

At last it was time to leave for the concert. So he hopped into his honda civic and sped off down the road. So he went backstage once he got there and saw all the stuff people were doing to prepare for the concert. All of a sudden he hears the the most delicate and soothing voice of a person he had ever heared.
“Hi I’m britney spears, but of course you know that. you must be tom the guy who won the backstage pass,right.”
“Yea that was me. I can’t believe I ‘m talking to you, so many people would want to experience that.”
” well you’re one of those lucky people. why don’t you come with me to my dressing room it’s more comfortable there. besides we have some time and we can talk about things.”
Tom who was still in a state of shock followed her. they talked about eachother and their lives. tom being curious ask what it was like being famous. then she asked him if had a girlfriend. he was unable to answer her. she went over and kissed him. she exploredd his mouth with her tongue and soon he did the same with his. she took her clothes off. she let him suck her voluptous breasts she unzipped his pants and started to suck his huge 9 inch cock.after a while he came and her concert was about to start. before leaving she said if you want more stay here and wait for me baby. to be continued
this is my first story i’m writing on this website so please leave some comments and let me know what you think

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  1. MEMEMEME says:

    STUPID STUPID AND EVEN STUPID

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  2. 88 says:

    Dreadful. Absolutely awful.

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  3. tonic says:

    “So he hopped into his honda civic and sped off down the road. So he went backstage once he got there and saw all the stuff people were doing to prepare for the concert.”try this instead “So he hopped into his honda civic and sped off down the road. once he got there he went backstage and saw all the stuff people were doing to prepare for the concert. the 2 so’s throws off the vibe in the beginging of the story. double check things make sure it sounds right then post it.if you double read and theres something that throws off the mood to yourself then it will throw off the mood to many others as well and needs to be changed to keep the vibe of the story flowing flawlessly, and makes more people apreciate it more. other then that keep writting you have a good start next time get more detailed on the feelings and what is happening around details mean everything.”first want to just tear her clothes off and fuck her” instead of “fuck her” make it so he has more pasion for her if he likes her so much in that way put and make pasionate love to her. also slow down a bit nobody likes a rushed short story.those are the worse.

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  4. joeice345 says:

    you’re story was looking good until they started to get intimate. Right when it was getting interesting, it ended. Add more details and make it last longer.

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  5. Mishivious says:

    Hi honey yes umm your story needs a lot of work i have read the other comments listen to those who have been around more your stories need to keep the reader interested it needs to make them squirm and touch themselves when reading it it needs to get them aroused especially when its whats this site called ohhh FANTASIES it needs to sound so real actually picture yerself as this person what would you want to do with britney spears how long would you want it to last imagine yerself as the characters or whover your figure is learn from yer mistakes though honey we all have learned from them read others stories and see how many times they have been read and find out why thats all i can tell you honey have fun and i look forward to see your next one

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  6. buttercup says:

    yuck

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  7. crap says:

    sorry, it was crap

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  8. solo says:

    dude wat u gat up in ur head sand.kids will say snow white is better than this

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  9. nightwolf says:

    you need to be more detail about your story. all it said was you fucked her no datail about it at all.

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  10. truplaya69 says:

    good but short put up part 2 a.s.a.p

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  11. Ramcharger says:

    Hon, with all due respect, you can do better. That was far too short to get off on, much less even build up on. You need better detail and grammar. Your punctuation wasn’t overall bad, but wasn’t good either. You have a good story line here and with some honest hard work you can make it into a good story. I would edit this part and begin by saying how you won the tickets in the first paragraph, have the second paragraph show your journey from your house to the concert, describe what you were wearing along with descriptions of a few other women you saw along the way to the back stage entrance and compare them to Spears. Next paragraph start describing what all you are looking at when you first heard her voice behind you, and then what all she was wearing when you turned around. This is about all I will give you, so for the rest, just make sure you give plenty of detail on what you are both doing to yourselves and eachother, what the hormone levels are doing and so forth. I will wait to see the better one.

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  12. Soulmage says:

    That was about 1 sentence long. Make it longer

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  13. xxx says:

    that was utter bollox!

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  14. Elminster says:

    A bit to short!

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  15. jpar86 says:

    dude make it longer, add detail, put the
    part two up soon, but good setting

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  16. CuntLover says:

    Dude, you are one lucky bastard! I would’ve NEVER dreamed of anyone fuckin’ Britney Spears! Of course, I am only 12, what do I know!

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